Date: 2017-05-10 06:21 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] euni2319
Sorry for my late reply!

I agree so much, this story introduced Madara so well and gave us subtle hints on other characters we already love ;_; ♥ Madara's already showing hints that he has his own sad backstory as do all enstar characters... Lol. And I love it :') I'm really excited for more, and I hope Kanata gets more spotlight for him! Personally it was Chiaki in this story that got me hard since I'm a Chiaki/RyuseitaiP, but in general this is just suuuuch a good story, one of my top fav!

There wasn't any mistakes at all, you've done such a great job on this translation, I have no idea how you managed it in 5-ish days, as soon as I found out about your translation I sent the link to literally all my friends LOL ;; thank you so so much. There's only the small typos of who talks and what not, which I have a few more to point out:

In Slasher riot part 6:
Madara: Eh, I can battle too? Target shooting with shuriken, huh~, kind of like the target game at a festival, sounds fun ♪

This should be Shinobu!

Flowers on the battlefield part 5
(As his predecessor, I should pointing out the right path, but...) -> forgot the "be" in should be

Madara: yup. Everyone else (...) -> Minor but missing capitalisation on Yup

That might've been it? I know I've said it so many times but seriously, thanks so much, you've done God's work :')